Demons Not Included – Cheyenne McCray [Review]

Demons Not Included is the first book in the series, written by Cheyenne McCray. This urban fantasy novel was published on June 2, 2009 by St. Martin’s Paperbacks.

Demons Not Included cover



Meet Nyx. This half-human, half–Drow private eye investigates paranormal crimes by day and is an elite Tracker of demons by night. She prefers working solo—and playing rough. So when a terrifying force starts murdering innocent humans and paranorms, and leaving strange demonic symbols burned into their buildings, it’s a case Nyx takes very personally…

Meanwhile, Nyx’s fellow Trackers are being killed one by one—and a sexy new Tracker named Torin is shadowing her every move. Torin has powers Nyx can’t read, and sometimes she wonders whose side he’s on. Nyx’s instincts tell her something’s brewing in the city’s meanest supernatural streets, and that it’s ready to unleash hell on Earth. Who can she trust? Now it’s five minutes to permanent midnight…and Nyx’s last chance means risking everything—even her own life.




I read Demons Not Included because I had heard a lot of great things about Cheyenne McCray.

This review was originally posted on my old blog Books That Hook. I am updating it and expanding on many of my original points.

Quick Review: I hated the main character, but I liked the action, pacing, and story line.

The Story

Nyx is half-human, half Drow (dark elf). She looks like a human during the daytime, but at night she’s purple (yes, I said purple, not amethyst like she insists throughout the book) with blue hair.

She runs a private investigation business, but also works as a Tracker to hunt down demons. Demons have been killing her fellow trackers. She needs to find their lair and stop them.

The plot points fit together well, and the story moves quickly from one point to the next. There’s plenty of action in the book to keep things interesting. I felt that the plot was consistent. However, I often felt like minor details didn’t match up. I just couldn’t put my finger on what they were, and I didn’t care enough to go back and try to find where something different had been said.

The Characters

Nyx is not someone I could relate to. She seemed self-centered and vain. Some of the comments added in the book, particularly at the beginning, seemed like afterthoughts to try to make her more likable. It took a long time for me to believe that she really cared about the people who were being murdered. Plus, she’s a clothing snob who carries a designer purse to crime scenes. That part just seemed ridiculous. The only thing I liked about Nyx was her strong backbone. She didn’t let people walk over her.

The main character has two romantic interests. She is really interested in a human named Adam, but she’s afraid he’ll reject her when he sees what she looks like at night. Her other love is an elf named Rodan, who she knows will never be able to commit to just her.

I liked the tension brought on by Torin, who is forced to work with Nyx, but doesn’t get along with her.

Her sidekick Olivia is great. I loved her t-shirt collection with interesting sayings.

The Writing

Overall, the writing is sound without grammatical, punctuation, or spelling errors. The author was skilled at writing action scenes and creating atmosphere and suspense. I felt she developed well the mystery of the killings. She kept me guessing about which master demon was behind them.

I liked how nothing was left hanging at the end, but she set up Nyx for a new case and, thus, a new book.

Off-topic: Nit-picky, but the cover’s wrong. Nyx only wears the corset and leather stuff when she’s a Tracker, which is only at night. Since that’s her nighttime demon-fighting outfit, she should be purple and have blue hair. She never wears that stuff when she’s human.

Do I Recommend?

Ugh, this is hard for me because, as a whole, I liked this book a lot. But, I didn’t like the main character. If I had to base my rating on the plot, it would be between 4 and 5 stars. If I had to base it on my feelings about the characters, my rating would be a 1 or a 2. So, I’m going to with a 4 overall. I liked the book enough to read the next book in the series.

I think this is a book people should give a chance if they haven’t read it yet. It has a lot of positives, definitely more than negatives. However, it’s not going to be for everyone.

My Rating: 4 out of 5 stars (B)

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